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This scene is from quite near the end, when things are starting to get messed up, and some brutal choices have to be made. Our pirates are desperately sailing to get a cargo of fuel for the Terraformer, because the colony’s dome is cracked and the atmosphere is leaking into space. The millions that live there are depending on the fuel so the dome can repair itself. Too bad the dragon doesn’t care about all that. It just wants one thing. It wants Miss Xing…
The hull was breached between two bulkheads, and Talwar was hanging onto the doorway, hacking with the falcon sword, water streaming past him. He couldn’t close the door because the dragon was most of the way inside, whipping around and gouging the hole bigger with its claws. A swing of his sword sent up a hiss of steam, fogging our visors.
I spotted Xing on the walkway above us, fingers curled around a balustrade, leaning out over the crashing water…
She looked. “Roger? Who’s steering the ship?”
“Nevermind that, just don’t do what I think you’re doing-”
“This is the only way.”
That’s it for this week’s eight. Looking forward to checking out what everyone else has posted!
Nooo! Miss Xing- do not feed yourself to the dragon! I’m counting on someone to fix this situation soon. 🙂
Exciting, action-packed snippet!
If only there were some other way…
Thank you! Glad you liked it 🙂
Wow, first time here, but I can tell it’s time for me to backtrack and read some of the prior snippets. Great stuff!
Thank you! Haha they don’t really follow on from one another unfortunately. I just keep skipping around the thing while I’m editing. I should put in some links though. Thanks again, mate!
Uh oh! Martyrdom looms… Very descriptive. DR. The action comes to life. 🙂
She is a bit of an all-or-nothing character, so tomartyrdom isn’t much of a leap for her unfortunately. Thank you! Description is normally my weakest point, so if this evokes anything, HUZZAH! 🙂
Sounds like an Uh-oh moment is coming up. Great snippet. You’ve done a wonderful job creating tension through action.
Definitely am uh-oh coming up. Actually more like two chapters full of uh-oh moments… Thank you! Thank you very much 🙂 tension is something I’m trying to work on, so I’m really glad you picked that out
I like the sense of chaotic action. And the dragon.
Haha Thank you! I thought to my self when I started writing “Now Davo, you can take the sensible path, and write about politics and betrayal and struggles for integrity… Or you can write about pirates and Dragons.”
There was only ever one way that decision could have gone.
Exciting, nonstop…I hope there’s an alternative to Xing giving herself to the dragon! Excellent excerpt, can;t wait for more…
Thank you, really appreciate it! Well, here’s hoping…
“Never mind that . . . ”
I have a feeling they might mind in just a bit. 😀
I love “Miss Xing” . . . does she disappear a lot?
Hehe, yup! Especially since they’re piloting through a narrow channel in the ocean floor… not the best time to abandon the helm.
Miss Xing does disappear a lot, so it was an awesome moment when I figured out what the title “Miss” would do to her name! She’s a generally mysterious young lady, an actress, a chauffeur, a tour guide, and potential pirate trainee, so the name is all her.
Glad you liked the snippet 🙂
You are skilled in the art of dialogue badassery my friend. Good stuff.
Cheers mate! Really happy to hear that. 🙂